This is a very well written little poem. I love how the poem leaves the reader with something to think about in the end (for example; what was it written about? who is it about? what does it mean?) and then you go back and read it again to find the answers.

Nothing I can see that needs improving, oh, maybe it becoming a little more emotional but I doubt that would work because it's such a short poem.

Great job, 5/5

jess ~

Hmm the was very short but very meaningful. every word has a great deep meaning and very well express. u have portrayed ur emotions though it short but it has a long feelings behind it. great imagery and great flow keep it up5/5

Even though it was short, it was meaningful. You can say some powerful stuff in very little words. You can almost say nothing and it will almost be meaningful. Good job.

Wow...ur writing is very deep. i am usually into the longer material of writing but this was really good i enjoyed it!

Oooh... beautiful and sad...
i liked it, hun. 5/5