This was beautiful. I'm don't know much about poetry so i can't give you some expert answer about how "these words worked well in time with this thought" or what not, but I can say that this is an amazing poem. I could feel the emotion. It gave me chills. Keep up the great work.
~Kayla
P.S. You should start teaching other guys to think the same way that you do in this poem!

OMG... really liked this one.. Sorta sounds like a song.... Something of Chris Brown's. Great job....lol

5/5

xxDanixx