Cheater, Cheater

Ha, you were right, I really did enjoy this one. It was so full of truth and voice; two things that make a poem amazing. Also:

Cheater, Cheater
There you are
Although you are loved
You are no star
^^I loved how you started off with the repetition of the word 'Cheater'. It caught my attention and it made me try to put a voice with the words lol. I'm not sure if that made sense, but just know that it is a good thing.

"We know why you smile
We know why you grin
You don't fool us girls
You're a cheater within"
^^Nice. It is sort of a battle between women and the cheating men eh. And it's so true that a woman ALWAYS knows =]

"We know who you are
Your guys worship you
They look to you for advice
So they can copy what you do"
^^in the second line, I think that 'The' should take the place of 'Your'. It's just a suggestion though.

"Girls see through your looks
Hurting us, you can't live without
You make girls want to scream
You make girls want to shout"
^^My favorite stanza. To me, it seems as if this is the stanza where you are taking a stand and actually stating how cheating men makes you feel. Sort of the climaxx so to speak.

"You're nothing but a cheater
You attempt to hurt us inside
You hope to take our confidence
Your goal is to steal our pride"
^^suggestion: you should place commas after 'cheater' and 'confidence', and add periods.

"One thing you haven't done
Is succeed with your scheme
We girls are stronger than that
We have solid self-esteem"
^^perfect!

"Cheater, Cheater
Your game ends here
Us women stick together
We no longer have any fear"
^^great ending! way to stand up and put a end to the Cheater's game. Loved it!

Overall, well written peice. The strong female voice was heard throughout the entire poem. Perfectly and beautifully written all in its own.
5/5

Kay Jay

This was a very cute poem. Coming from someone who has been cheated on, it is difficult to cope with. But having friends like you and having others to relate makes it feel less lonely. This poem was very strong and it gets across the point. It attacks and it destroys. Wonderful and powerful.
<3Raych

Tats such a good poem.. poems like these you can just read all day.. keep it up!!

Its wonderful way of expressing yr feelings. Keep it up..

I thought the concept was nice. I liked how it looked as if guy defeated the girls from the start, but at the end it came out with the girls high and mighty on top.

Your rhyming was alright, but your word choice was a little ordinary. Next time writing try to use words you've never used before. It'll help your poem sound better as well as help the reader be more interested in what they're reading.

My honest critique: 4/5

P.S. - You're absolutely right; you're friend doesn't need a guy to prove that she's special and loved.