by Siro aKa Gaara Aug 27, 2008
category :
Friendship, family /
best friends
I set out in this world, |
by Rachel RTVW
Too many I's and other filler words. You shouldn't begin a line with and.....I do think it was clever and I enjoyed the repetition of My footsteps led back to you in every other stanza. You could be a little more creative throughout the piece with your word choice. A decent job though..... |
by Ingrid
Ps: I nominated you too:) |
by Ingrid
This is such a well written poem.. |