Deep Dark Hole.
by Courageous Dreamer Aug 27, 2008
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-This poem kind of changes from sad to happy. I'm not quite sure what category it fits best. Also, it's kind of a story poem - just a heads up! |
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16 years ago
That's a very deep poem..Because transition is not easy when it's from sadness to happiness..
I think it's a sign that u r not a weak person who simply gives up..
I liked the subject so much:)
Good job,plz keep it up.. -
16 years ago
by BREEawNUHH
I like the transition, from sad to happy. It shows that people can get through things, regardless of what happens in their life.
"Somedays I cried for hours on end-
nobody there to wipe away the tears.
I was surrounded by pain and regret-
no hope remained inside me.
Never did I once think I'd survive this fight."
-- In the second line, I think you should add something after "nobody". Maybe "was". "..nobody was there.." And in the fourth line, I think you should add "of" after "inside".
Everything else is flawless. Five out of five. [5/5]
``Briana -
16 years ago
by Adelle
It flowed but nothing in it really captured me I could feal no emotion when I read it and it just diden't keep me intrested bye the start of the last stanza I just wanted to stop reading. You explain you fealings well now you just need to add some emotion to them.
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16 years ago
This was a beautiful poem. Very good flow. I love how your poems are always so descriptive about the feelings, or the places you or your charachter is in. I this particular poem, I find it very sad, but in a was very happy. Every girl needs to pick themselves up every once and a while. I think a few people could learn from ti actually. 5/5
