Let Me Decay Here, Beside My Broken Heart.

I liked this. I thought it was honest, and straight from your heart. The emotion came through, as well. The only thing I can say I dislike is the fact that you use a lot hyphens where they're not needed.

"I tried to stay happy, full of hope-
but I'm realizing that's impossible.
Hope has been washed away along with-
the smile that only shined for a day or two."

-- In the third line.

"One day I'm happy, the other I'm not.
I don't understand my feelings anymore-
they confuse me to the point where-
thinking is not an option to begin with."

-- In the third line.

""Maybe giving everything up to this point-
losing everything, drowning in my tears.
Being a failure, is what I've always been-
let me decay here, beside my broken heart."

-- In the first & third line.

"Life is too complicated to live these days-
why am I even here? I don't deserve this.
I wish the things in life that I want most-
would just come to me. I'm sick of fighting."

-- The third line.

Of course, I am not telling you to take them out, but I just thought I'd point out that I don't believe they're needed. Overall, I thought it was a good piece.

Five out of five. [5/5]

``Briana

Ok this poem talks to me I feel it I can feal your heart crying out. I do belive this could be made better I think this poem would work very well as a rhym and I think it would bring something special to this piece that it does not yet have.

It really breaks my heart.. nice emotion and it really touches my heart ,,, 5/5

Such sweet honesty is not something we encounter in our day to day lives. It is great that you can talk about you feelings in honest terms.

The first stanza pulled me in immeadetly.
"the smile that only shined for a day or two".

^^ wow very powerful words, especialy in the first few lines.

The rest of your poem had consistent flow and had very good emotions. You say this isn't your best, but it was very amazing to me. You're a great poet. Keep up the beautiful work.<3

5/5