Empty Arms & Broken Melodies

Mommy's arms are empty,
My heart, quietly shattered.
Hope's a broken melody,
Constantly beat and battered.

(I love how you start this. it's like you are opening up a door to your world and you're letting me see into your life)

But still, the song plays..
Somewhere inside.
Despair grows strong within.
I know with it, I can't confide.

(I love how you tie in music here, very nice)

The tune begins to fade,
The memory's still here.
I slowly burn inside...
with my hidden fear.

(Great how things get sadder here, i can feel your pain. very emotional)

Then I come to realize,
It'll never be okay.
Even with passing time,
Life will be overwhelmingly gray.

(This part was sad, even though you are talking about being okay. love the imagery here also)

I put my hand on my tummy.
Mommy's thinking of you.
Sweet angel of mine,
Are you thinking of me too?

(aww this is sweet, great stanza, ligthens the mood a little.)

I never got to see your smile.
I never got to hear your voice.
I never got to feel your hug.
I never even got a choice.

(This part makes me want to cry, very deep and emotional)

I strain my ears to hear the sound
Of the sweet gently melody.
A single tears forms in my eye.
I know this wasn't meant to be.

(Beautiful imagery here once again, you have a great talent)

I close my eyes, still listening,
But I can't hear the sound.
I'm searching for a distant hope,
But it seems it can't be found.

(Great, i feel like i'm searching for hope with you. i love how i can connect with your words)

Mommy's arms, still empty.
My heart's drowning in sand.
I open my eyes and try to smile.
Someday, I'll understand.

(This was amazing. I loved everything about it. Keep it up. Shank)

If you are the right person, this has a very emotional impact. Good Job Bianca!

Aww this was really sad. very touching, lot of emotion. i liked this verse;

"I never got to see your smile.
I never got to hear your voice.
I never got to feel your hug.
I never even got a choice."

hit home for me. 5/5 xo.

A really touching poem, keep up

That was so emotional. the words were a really good choice and also the meaning. love this poem. it was sad but great. keep writing.
-Stephanie