Woow. I must say I adored this piece. It's unlike anything I've read from you. The format was unique. I loved it. The word choice was really good. Every word you described so well. You expanded on everything oh so well. Such a sad piece, everything built up inside this girl and now all she sees is death. Sad write. Yet, you captured that emotion so well. 5/5. (:

Wow nice job... great poem... :]

uhm... yeah.. 5/5

Written flawlessly..SHort yet very very powerful one.. I liked the unique style of how you wrote it..The idea was so vivid and the whole poem has supported the title all the way..I liked the line where you mentioned about the baby's laughter and it aches you..Very nice indeed..Good Job..5/5

I really enjoyed reading this.. its so explaintory and it shows the real emotions and the real feelings behind you when you wrote this piece.

I really did enjoy it and think that it was written so beautiful for a depressive based piece..

i hope that your feelings pick up for you and that you escape the suicidal min set soon!

well done girl 5/5

xoxoxoxox

This poem was unique, especially for it's structure. You gave one worded line and than described how it is connected. I loved the rhyming, and the way you wrote this poem, it was very inspiring.

Nice job 5/5

OMG that is just an amazing and strong piece of poetry. The main thing i like the most about it would have to be you just pretty much described the way i have been feeling for the past 5 months.

you are a gifted person.

Its amazing write...
i love the ending much more...
and i love how you combined laughter with children... and you left adults out of it...

it shows somehow, that children are more innocent that adults... good one...

I rather much like that. And sadly there was a time in my life that I felt that way too.
5/5

Wow ur amazing :O. I literally ...wow o-O lol.

This poem maybe short in a sense but it is filled with lots of meaning and so many people can relate to it. I enjoy poems with powerful meaning :) Anyway I myself can relate to this poem it's so dark and depressing. It really caught my eye :)
Keep up the amazing work mwah mwah mwah xxxxx
Mucho love,
Roxy xxx

Wow. it was short but amazing. great detail. i love it!

Lol,its so unique
really love it
xD