A Confused Heart Struggles To Write.

by Courageous Dreamer   Aug 28, 2008


Author's Note:
I'm not really sure what this poem is about. It's kind of about a heart that was broken and now is so confused, that the feelings and emotions within her heart no longer spill out on paper.. instead all that remains is a blank piece of paper with no ink on it. It may sound like a poem about writer's block. Interpret as you wish. (:

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The pen used to release so many emotions-
is now becoming invisible; the ink is fading.
Pad of paper remains blank and without words-
mind confused; no words pouring out.

Attempting to write these feelings results in failure-
the words just slip off the paper in frustration.
Broken heart; shattered to pieces and alone;
not a single word can explain the piercing pain.

Hand aching, as it struggles to write the words-
cramping; more pain; it's not what she needs.
Pen on paper; she moves the pen with a light stroke.
No ink; all that remains is a blank piece of paper,
no matter how much effort she puts into spilling-
all the emotions and feelings from her confused heart.

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  • 16 years ago

    by HidinVictim

    Cute i can really relate to this piece, just broke up with my boyfriend about 1 1/2 weeks ago and i still haven't written anything new... im basically living you poem great job, i liked it alot, the flow was a bit off, but then if your the one who couldn't write than this is *amned good, wish youu would have put this in smaller stanzas personally, but thats just me... 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by StarGirl

    My absolute fav of yours so far! It's kinda the opposite of that Natasha Beddingfield's song (can't remember the name of it). Most of the time when I try to write I feel like this poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    I loved the title! It really captured my attention and made me want to read the poem. Great job!

    1st Stanza.
    I loved this opening. It lured me in and made me curious how this poem was going to unfold. The imagery was right on and your choice of words brought everything to life.

    "mind confused; no words come pouring out"
    ^I think the word "come" here is out of place and this sentence would flow better without it. It made the sentence shaky.

    2nd Stanza.
    I could relate with this stanza 100% So much emotion was just seeping through your words and I could truly feel what you were expressing. The pain felt real and I could tell this came straight from your heart.

    "Attempt to write feelings results in failure"
    ^Hmmm this sentence doesnt flow well for me. I think it would sound better if it was "Attempting to write these feelings results in failure"

    3rd Stanza:
    Hmmm I dont know how I feel about this stanza. It was kind of like a weak closing and just repeating the same thing over and over. I did like the concept behind your words though. It was very unique, refreshing, and interesting to read so I applaud you on that. :]

    Well done.
    I really did enjoy it.
    I could tell it came straight from the heart.
    *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Wow its my honor to comment this poem coz im the ist one,, hmmm,, anyway i like that message its kinda real and very meaningful more this lines..

    The pen used to release so many emotions-
    is now becoming invisible; the ink is fading.
    Pad of paper remains blank and without words-
    mind confused; no words come pouring out.

    there are times i felt like that , the message was very dedicated to all readers,, keep on writing all what u feel, coz sometimes it help us to heals our un express emotions inside our hearts.. great job5/5

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