Hmmm that was rather sad and don't we just feel that way when we feel lonely and sad? well written girl

Grant

When the heart can't stand alone
It feels so sad
When there's no beat
There’s no happiness
When you're not here
This life has no more ecstasy

Do you remember me?
When you're all alone
Missing me and moody
Till your heart breaks

The love you promise
Still in the memory
Until the end will be together
Even if it rains or is stormy
Though it's the end of the world
Me and you are still together

Do you remember me?
When you leave me
Wounded and broken
Misery and no direction.

This one is too good to be down rated by the literal grammar patrol sweet lig
The only improvement I would suggest is to and a verb to the fifth line
And replace your with you are or youre

The rest should fall well within poetic license
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this is a beautiful poem

When the heart cant stand alone
It feels so sad.
When theres no beat
Theres no happiness
When your not here
This life no more ecstasy
^^I would suggest if youll use comma especially after the word LIFE…Apostrophes were supposed to be found as well in the word CANT and THERES. YOUR should be YOURE, by then this will be a little easy to follow.

Do you remember me,
When youre all alone?
Missing me and moody
Till your heart breaks
^^ I think you should put comma after ME and then question mark after ALONE. Apostrophe must be present in the word YOURE. And I dont think the word moody suit in this line.

The love you promise
Still in the memory
Until the end will be together
Even if it rains or stormy
Though its the end of the world
Me and you still together
^^ These lines are somehow ok.. Although you could have used deeper words and they were lacking of punctuations again. These are just my opinions...xDD

Do you remember me?
When you leave me
Wounded and broken
Misery and no direction.
^^ The question mark I think should be applied after the word leave me. It would be better if the last line was written as WITH MISERY AND NO DIRECTION..

Well, as what Michael said I wont downgrade this for it is your genuine feeling that is behind it. Keep writing..

I think most of us can relate to the pain you feel and to the position that you're in, I know I can. It's always tough to be alone, especially without the one you love. We just have to stay strong and pray it gets better with time, even though it doesn't always :( amazing job 5/5 GG23

"When the heart cant stand alone
It feels so sad
When theres no beat
Theres no happiness
When your not here
This life no more ecstasy"

I absolutely adore this stanza =P. Its so emotional, and true. Its something i can relate to. and thats hard to do.

Keep it up! 5/5!
Dollface.

This was really sad! I thought some of your lines were a little too short, but they don't take away from the poem. It was very emotional. I loved it.

I like the words you used. I could picture everything while I was reading. bravo:)

The way you write is different. It's not bad, but could be better. You have a lot of potential as a writer and this poem shows that. I really liked this poem. It had a good flow and tons of emotion.

5/5

Keep it up!