Comments : Love is Electric

  • 16 years ago

    by TravisInABottle

    First off, all of the descriptions you've made I believe to be 100% true. Indeed, love does do all of these things.

    I'd like to suggest using punctuation. Punctuation at the ending of your lines could make your poem more appealing to the eye; it certainly would for me.

    Repitition is great if used correctly, but I'm not sure if I like 'love' repeated every single line. Sometimes that can be overpowering and take away from the poem.

    The very last line was my favorite, and the most powerful to me.

    My honest critique: 3/5