It's the first poem you wrote I comment on, and it seems like a rap song of a sort. There are rhymes here and there. The structure is one big stanza, which is more of a modern poetry. The language is simple, and the idea is bolt there. A lot of images, and colorful play with words. Like I said, not used to this unconventional type of writing, a fine piece, though the flow falls here and there because of the structure 4/5