WHY RAZOR WHY

Wow, very emotional, and I understand where your coming from. good job. 5/5

Sometimes also, a good self-harm poem is one that doesn't talk about it outright for people to judge, but get them drawn in by creating a verbal picture of the emotions you feel at the cutting moment, or the emotions that you feel afterward, that cause you to desparately wonder why. I am not saying I am perfect, but to better illistrate my point, my poem, "Fallen Again" is about cutting, but a little less outright. It at least will convey my point better. And remember, its only a suggesting, not a judgment.

Hey hun, this is a great start to what could be such a beautiful poem. You have an emotional subject and a message to convey about it, now its time to spice it up. Try using some a variety of words that in themselves, evoke emotion. That will add greatly to your poem. Maybe also include why you are wondering "Why" you cut? Are you ashamed, confused, proud? Try to add some more personalized emotion and information. The thing about self-harm poems is that there are A LOT of them, so you have to work harder to make people want to read them.