The exquisite AUDREY

I hate you mau!

hehehhe joke!

thanx for those corrections of my grammar.

and i submit myself unto saying you are right.

thanx a lot.

I remember this cute little AUDREY
This cute little AUDREY:
With a smile, so sweetly

Her smile can easily build of gaiety
and can turn your world unto fantasy.
AUDREY ROSE is a girl so lovely;
she is salient and a girl of dainty.

That is Audrey,
the beautiful girl in her simplicity.
The fair lady AUDREY as years passed by,
I always ask myself. Why?
She still lingers upon my mind.

It was formerly considered correct to use whom whenever the objective form of who was required. This is no longer thought to be necessary although I think it would look better if it is WITH A SMILE.( These are just my opinions and you don’t have to go after. XDD )I put them into stanzas and put some punctuation marks in between. The word “and” after the word salient should starts with a small letter as it is placed in the middle of the sentence. As for the final stanza, Ive edited it and added some words and also punctuation marks.I liked this concept, uneven number of stanzas emphasized the originality of this poem and the uniqueness of your ideas, this is based from the words you used in it)

Wow, I think this looks even better. (Once again, just my opinion and can be disregard anytime.)