Temptation is Impossible to Resist.

I looked at this poem and thought it would just be another one of the usual copy cat poems that you see popping up here lately.

I began to read it and realized that it wasn't a poem like all the others, I believe it to be very uniqu and one of the most original poems that i Have read on here.

I did feel that you didn't let go though, like there was something you were holding back, all in all it was a really good read.

I gave it a 5/5

It feels a little wordy to me but I like the message it sends and I love this last bit of line the most "silences her lips with a kiss." Absolutely beautiful!

For some reason, I am not usually a fan of love poems. Though I know when they are well written when I read them. I found this one very descriptive, and full of details that really enhanced it's imagery. I think that there may have been only a few lines where I became a little confused in it's content, but it is no matter. Nothing that slight revision can't handle.

Believe me though I found that the majority of the poem was very lovable, and you had a fantastic word choice. So if you like it the way it is, then by all means I would keep it that way. This is one of the better poems that I've read from you.

Excellent work.

Love the title! Really caught my eye.

1st Stanza.
Amazing way to start your poem hun! Really captures the attention of the reader and makes them want to read more. Your use of imagery here was flawless and your experimentation with new words just made this stanza shine.

"butterflies tickle her with hope; making her heart smile."
^I love how that made me feel. You took something many overuse in their poetry and you made it your own. Well done!

2nd Stanza.
Hmm okay too many his and hers here kinda got me confused. I had to read the stanza a couple of times to truly understand what youre trying to say and get the message you wanted to convey. This stanza needs a little bit of editing although it is really good. After the first stanza, which blew me away, this one really was just okay.

"Holding his hand potently, that lacks the safety he desires,"
^Okay I'm lost. She holds his hand that lacks the safety SHE desires or am I just understanding this wrong? Sorry I didnt get it...

3rd Stanza.
AHHHHH! WOW this just describes everything I went for in four lines. Wanting to declare your undying love for this person but scared of how they might react and if they truly love you too. You expressed this notion nicely my dear...flawless stanza. I could not find one thing wrong with it. Its hard to make stanzas flow with such long lines but this ones flow was flawless. I applaud you!

4th Stanza.
Love the ending! Soooo romantic!<3 Just making me smile like a person in love! You know that dopey smile that spreads across your face lol. Perfect way to end this wonderful piece hun. It was just flawless in expressing the desire these two have for each other and how they cannot pull away from one another. The title truly worked with the final stanza.

Loved this hun! I will nominated it. :]
Just read over the second stanza cause its kinda confusing.

Well done.
*5/5*

"Looking deeply into those comely eyes that go on for infinity,
butterflies tickle her with hope; making her heart smile.
Gazing at such beautifully formed lips that yearn romance,
makes her want to satisfy his pleasures that he withholds."

-- Ooh. I loved this. It was such an amazing way to begin the piece. The emotion really comes through the words, and the flow is absolutely superb.

"Holding his hand potently, that lacks the warmth he desires,
urges her to intertwine her fingers with his to see if they fit.
Arms full of emptiness, cold- search for a soulmate to hold,
sends shivers through her body, she could be the one."

-- Goodness. This is beautiful. Your word choice could not be better, as it is perfect already. Wonderful.

"Arid throat seeking for the words to express feelings appropriately,
makes her nervous and shake with anticipation of what he may say.
Mind entangled with millions of thoughts that wander freely throughout,
causes concern that he might give up all hope to be with her."

-- This stanza completely blew me away. It's my favourite of the piece. Once again, you've worded everything absolutely perfectly. There is nothing that needs to be changed whatsoever.

"The two cannot resist the temptation and chemistry admist their bodies-
craving each others touch, he intertwines his fingers with hers gently.
Aggressively captures her and twirls her in his arms providing warmth.
Underneath the dark sky, the two look into each others eyes attentively.
Night coming to a unwanted close, he silences her lips with a kiss."

-- IN the first line, I think by "admist", you meant "amidst". I could be wrong, but I think "amidst" is the correct word here. Other than that, everything was, of course, flawless. It reminds me of one of those older romance movies & stuff. Where two people are intimate with each other, without being graphic.

*Overall, I loved itttt! Once again, you've written a fabulous piece. Probably one of my favourites from you. Great job.

Five out of five.[5/5]

``Briana