If I Were To Die Tonight

by The Queen   Aug 31, 2008


IF I WERE TO DIE TONIGHT

So tell me mother, if I were to die tonight
Would you regret yelling at me all those times?
Or would it be easier to see me die?
Would your tears be enough to mend what I feel inside?
And make me rise from the mire I am at?

Would you cry a tear, if I were to die tonight
Instead of loving words to soothe my broken heart
For I have lost the right to know who my father was
Yet you fed me with your lies and fake smiles
So tell me mother, if I were to die tonight

Would it give you sorrow, if I were to die tonight
Would it touch your heart and you would love me at last?
Would it make you look back and remember the times?
How every night I wanted to hug you tight?
What I got instead is your cold back

Now remember, if I were to die tonight
For my heart is weary and I am in deep sorrow
Resonance of your words hurt me every time
You wanted me to die even if I'm not supposed to
However, I want you to know

It would solve my problems, if I were to die tonight
No matter how much you may hate me
No matter how much you screwed my life
No matter how many scars you have left me
I would still die tonight, just to see your smile back

And for my contentment, please don't forget to smile...before you say goodbye...

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  • 13 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    I have been reading this so much Myryn.

  • 14 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    Aww, Myryn... that is so sad. <3 I love you!

  • 14 years ago

    by victoria

    Wow....amzing. every question everyone wants answerd when thinkning about dieing. YOu are an amzinf writer....keep it up.

    victoria

  • 14 years ago

    by Nee

    I saw this in the thread, when you posted it for Yaki.
    I'm so sorry.. I don't know how it feels to have a mother like her, but I do know that parents can be so crazy..
    I really really liked your piece, however, it works better in a song..I'd actually cry.

    very well done with sending these emotions right from your heart to the reader's.
    Write on~ <3

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    So tell me mother, if I were to die tonight
    Would you regret yelling at me all those times?

    *Boy does that sound like something I'd say to my mom! Those first two lines really hit home for me.*

    Would you cry a tear, if I were to die tonight

    *That line bothered me a little because you talked about crying in the lines before it. I;d change it to something else. Maybe "would you notice if I died tonight" something that you haven't said before.*

    And for my contentment, please don't forget to smile...before you say goodbye...

    *I think this was was the best line of the poem. It has a lingering feeling to it. I think the poem would have been better for me if it was more like the last night. Not your best dear but still a sad and emotional piece. Very simple unlike some of your other poems but I think some liked that. Anyways keep writing :) Nik*

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