by Lori
I love this piece. It is soo beautiful and unique all at the same time. One thing that def caught my eye, was how every single stanza had five lines. I really liked it because I have never seen that before where ALL of them had it. I thought that part was really cool. |
by Robert
You have alot og generals in this piece which is good but nothing that is a concrete exsample for the reader to see the situation through your eyes. I agree that it is a powerful poem and it does leave a heavy impression on you but. I think if you added 2 exsamples to show the reader what had happend your work would be so much more better just a thought. I did really enjoy it though powerful... PS please any of my featured work Plot121 |
It's a difficult position to be in when the one's who are supposed to love you most turn there back on you. I honestly think some people would find it easier if we were just gone and out of there lives, soon enough we'll all be gone. Very well written with good flow, I loved the repetition it made the poem that much better. Great job 5/5 GG23 |
by Roxy
Omg!! Amazing poem sweetie^^ You really showed emotion through out this poem which is very good seeing as at the moment I have writters block ..Ahh what a horrible thing!! |
by Aryaan
Very interesting concept and you've written it very well. so much of emotions flow through the poem. good write! |
by Bugg
This was an interesting poem. It was really sad and it does hurt when someone we love so much, turns their back to us. I really felt the emotion in this poem. It was great. |
by Sweet lig
Awtzzzzzz this is really a sad piece! i was really interested reading this when i read the titled so theres no doubt. i love reading sad poet so i can say that is ont of the most sad piece of poetry, fille w/ deep emotion and it really poured my tears, its such a very unhappy and very emotional, u had really express ur deep emotion here and i guess u finally overcome all of these hard feelings inside ur heart.. keep on writing all what u feel,, i einjoyed this poem a lot 5/5 |
by Frozen hearT
Hey..... a new piece. |
Painful poem indeed, |
I really like this, great job! |
This is good, keep it up, 7/5 |
IF I WERE TO DIE TONIGHT |
This poem reflects the way harsh words hurt deeply |
by Paiger
Beautifuly writen, you can really feel the emotion coming through in your words :) Great job |
by SHYSTY23KO
Aw this is so sad! |
by Dark Savior
Would your tears be enough to mend what I feel inside? |
I'm speechless. This poem moved me so deeply. The concept was unreal... it had me trapped. I couldn't stop reading if I wanted to. The flow, word usage, and concept were flawless. Not to mention unnoticeable... This poem was so beautiful you could not even see anything else... |
by HaileyHelen
Okay. First off, wow! This was filled with emotion. It seemed as if you were yelling, or crying, as you wrote this. It is incredible. The form is brilliant There was rhyming although I couldn't find a specific scheme, it tied it together nicely. I liked the repitition at the begginings of the stanzas as well. Very nicely done. again, 5/5 |
by KemistryKia
That was so beautiful and the fact i can relate shows whats so beautiful about poetry-the relation and unique intensity sincerly the best |
This was a beautifully written poem. It expressed deep emotion, everything you felt, everything you wanted to and at the very end, you wrapped it all up with what you WANTED. It was a great way of ending it, powerful by itself and how you put it in there was spectacular. |