The images you conveyed was really well done but I think you left out some words in the first two stanzas it was better then the last. Keep trying you will get there Plot121

Hmmm across the floor, well i cant really relate about this poem, but there is still some words are truly express what means for! so i give it 4/8, keep it up!

Hey this is a really good poem the imagery was great and it has good meaning to it as well i really enjoyed reading this 5/5

Absolutely amazing poem. Easily the best poem I've read from you. The flow was excellent, the concept was beautiful, and the word usage was astonishing. 5/5 for sure! Great work...

I love the description. i picture it so clearly