Im lost in the dust

by Crack   Sep 1, 2008


Im lost in the dust
Were ive always been
Buried in the sand under
The eye of the storm

Hidden beneath the horrors of the sun
Were ive always known
Buried in the dirt under
The eye of the storm

You glow through the dust
Were ive never been
Digging through the sand beneath you
Under the eye of the storm

You burn beneath the horrors of the sun
Where ive never known
On top of my body
In the eye of the storm

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  • 16 years ago

    by jasmine cherry

    Now i know this poem could be very good but i think you should take out some of the repeating lines. i think the first verse is good and in the second verse i think yo should change what to where. Also in the third verse you should change in the third line i think you should add "beneath you" after sand. lastly change what to where and this i think will make the poem is last line. As i lay in the eye of the storm. <clap> <clap> that last line i think will bring it all together if you don't change anything i think you should change that. OH DON'T BE MAD AT ME I DON'T LIKE PEOPLE FIXING MY POEMS EITHER. +I HAVE NO LIFE

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