Now i know this poem could be very good but i think you should take out some of the repeating lines. i think the first verse is good and in the second verse i think yo should change what to where. Also in the third verse you should change in the third line i think you should add "beneath you" after sand. lastly change what to where and this i think will make the poem is last line. As i lay in the eye of the storm. <clap> <clap> that last line i think will bring it all together if you don't change anything i think you should change that. OH DON'T BE MAD AT ME I DON'T LIKE PEOPLE FIXING MY POEMS EITHER. +I HAVE NO LIFE