While the ending line still doesn't feel "right" for me, the overall effect of this poem merits more than just a "4"... the tone and aural sense is like an Orphus piece, more than just something I read on a page...the poet has a deftly used style that embraces the receiver and does not release it till near the end with a style that is consistent :) Well worth the read/experience!

Wow i loved this piece, it was so beautiful in its own painful and sad way.
love is a painful ride that is never easy, it has its highs and lows but the thing is that nothing in life is perfect, everyone deserves to be loved but love often ends up being the reason for a heart to break. it happens all to often and i am pretty sure that everyone can relate to the hurt which this poem portrays. i loved your reference to an ocean being the division between you and the person which you love. but eventually the ocean will wash away the pain and take along with it the tears that you have cried. a really great piece, i loved it. take care,

You know shellaine, this isn't why I wrote this, but okay, i can see that.