Scars of Dark

Luanne, this piece is awesome. It's funny because I went off the club poems page, just read Frank's "So deep in love" poem feeling good and happy. You took me from my happy place into this desolate feeling of darkness. Not exactly a good thing, but way to use such powerful emotions to key me in.

Ancient moments fuse the mind
shadows hold upon waters deep
heart recalls haunted times
when memories betrayed sleep

What a nice, nice stanza. The last line is phenomenal. It flows so well.

Great write! Thanks for sharing!

Hey Luanne, nice to read some of your poems again...

What a cleverly written, thought provoking piece. Excellent word choice, rhythm and flow. I love that you have not used forced rhyming and this poem is deep and meaningful!

Desolate soul grips reality
courage ignited from a spark
closing doors of foregone days
unleashing shackled scars of dark
This stanza is fantastic. A ray of hope at last! Very well constructed lines.
Through out the poem lines are very strong. Like... 'Naked in the arms of misery...' Brilliant. Fabulous work!

An excellent write Luanne,Sometimes it takes a lot of courage to open up your heart and lay it out there for all to see. The true mark of a poet.Allowing the reader to feel our pain,facing the vulnerability. My hats off to you ,excellent rhymes and flow. great job!