Hey this is a really good poem you hav used your vocab very well the flow is great and i absolutely loved it

Interesting...I like your diction cuz it flows well together. The rhyme scheme actually fits this. There is a problem with the last line because it "to try only have" does not make sense. Just a heads up. The undertone gives off a darkness that suits this piece.
~Faith-less

Wow, that was a truly amazing piece. it was one of those poems that just kept me intrigued by each word. your use of wording was perfect. This was such a powerful piece it really reflected the dark truth that everyone tries to deny.***Left with happiness that only fills fleeting dreams
Trying in reality no matter what the futile means
Trapped by desperation in maze with no gate
Falling down to try only have morals desecrate.****
wow, this final stanza was absolutely incredible. it just had such an impact and really brought the poem 2gether. you really have an amazing talent!!! Keep it up!!
shells

I really liked it. 5/5. I liked the flow and the words. it sounds good.

Loved it, i liked the flow of it, awesome job 7/5

Loved the poem u have great flow

Your dark is beautiful my friend.

Very well put together, but felt somewhat forced towards the middle, but the flow was very well thought out and the rhyme scheme was simply wonderful. Loved the message as well my friend. 4/5

Sincerely,
Elizabeth

This one had a nice flow to it. I liked the message in this one too. Godd job.

Wow this was amazing. it told such a visual story. very nice read. please keep writing you're amazing. 5/5. thanks for the comment on mine by the way.

-Liv.

This was a great poem the images you painted with your words were great and the images stark and real great work all and all the flow was abit off but as a whole great work Plot121

Wow this was just amazing! What always stands out to me in your poems is your flawless flow and how you always get the rhyme to go together nicely without anything seeming forced or out of place. Great choice of words to create this grueling scene. I was captivated and could imagine everything nicely in my mind with your descriptions. Filled with an immense amount of power and strength really added to the overall meaning.

Well done.
*5/5* :]