Jim,

In case you wrote this for me: I am sorry for having been so unkind. It's just my nature: I push away all those who try to come close.
My childhood has left me broken beyond repair.
You are a great writer and as such I admire you.

Take care,

Ingrid

This was a very moving write jim, you really know how to write from the heart. i cant add any critisism on this comment, becos the ryhm and flow are silky and the passion is strong. this is REAL poerty in motion.

I loved it, it was amazing and you could really feel the pain you were going through when you finally had to let this person go. I know we have not talked in a very long time, but i still love your poetry and you are still one of the best poets i know. Hopefully we can talk soon!! Keep up the good work!!

This isn't the Jim I know. You have far more in you then this attitude, if someone is upset with you for what ever reason, then she just doesn't' know you as we do.
You're loved and wanted on this site,

Very sad poem, but meaningful and well written as usual, keep it up.

These two verses are the most profound for me. These words have been spoken many times by me and never heard by the intended recipient and it breaks my heart not to be heard. Thank you for expressing them in such a descriptive way.

9-8-08
Forgive me for needing a helping hand,
To overcome is a task for two.
I only wish you could understand,
It takes more than me....It takes you !

9-14-08
Forgive me for having a hungry heart,
for offering my sincerity.
I think it is time for me to depart,
so you won't have to try to tolerate me.

Wow this poem is a heart felt poem indeed... I like the idea of you jotting down the date of when you penned down the stanza. I think it's pretty unique.I also like the idea that you take your time to craft this poem as a perfect departure.The repeated used of 'forgive me ' kindda worked for me as it enhances of how sorry u are. The flow of the poem was fantastic. It was a really a delightful to read

Excellent Job
5/5

Beautiful and powerful write 5/5