Battlefield

Haha this is so interesting :D I've never read a poem based on breaking dawn such a creative idea. My favorite stanza was I think the second one? Because it says "shield you with my mind and love" I think there you are portraying Bella in this poem, am I correct? Because she has that field in which she can protect those around her :D It's an amazing poem and it also makes an interesting read.
You really have caught Bella's personality because she always think about others before herself. Also the last stanza I find very cute because it introduces the family and how you are going to stick together :D
Amazing read. xxxxx Keep it up
xxxx Roxy

Faith of the Fallen:

By the third stanza she changes theory on what to do to protect her family but i can see how that threw off the flow and lost you. :]

Actually the first line of the third stanza sort of threw the flow off for me. There's something about it that doesn't exactly go together with the rest. I don't know how to explain it. Maybe it's just me. Despite not reading the novels, I still find this piece intriguing and with sharp images.
~Faith-less

Well even though i havent read the book, i like this poem because of the words you use to make a picture in my head. Awesome job
-vino

Um.. Tried? it was beautiful. The ryhming is solid.
It had really good flow, you should tell me next time you write a poem. i wanna see it. 5/5