The last line of this work sometimes strike me as not feeling right...yet, its overall feel of delivery engages with the seemingly right words and syntax to the point the reciever is caught within its whole scaple sharp carved simple but deep presentation. Making it certainly above a mere "4". It may not be an unique poem in format and contents, but like a good Blues tune,catches/ it embraces something that is both the poet and its receiver, thus making it a delight to experience!

Ooh really interesting and thought provoking. i wrote a ghost poem recently myself, feel free to check it out. i like this, it's short but good. :]