Comments : Ill Effects

  • 16 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    A very dark and sad poem..It's too short but good...

    P.S.
    There is a typo
    Life call(s)...

    Nice work,keep it up..

  • 16 years ago

    by Ash

    A well written though short poem. But I think that even in these few lines was a simple message to all. Though I think that the first line could be changed to something else for the repetition of the word call evades the entire feeling and mood behind the poem. None the less I feel that this is a great attempt. 5/5 from me.