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"I have returned from hell a changed man I no longer cry nor I hurt for you"

Okay this is a really great opening line, but you have a run on sentence. Add a comma after "man" and then "for" before "I" , it will read much smoother. Next, place a period after "you".

"my heart transformed into stone my senses go cold , a new me a monster, I no longer care if I have happines or not,"

Capitalize the "m" in "my".

Add an "and" after "stone".

Instead of that comma at the end of the line, make it a period to end the line.

"love has died inside me and yet people look at me like if I was out of this world an odd object so stranged....."

Capitalize the "l" in "love.

Add a comma after "world" and add "just" before "an". To me it reads and sounds better. I think you were trying to write another word, because "stranged" does not make sense.

"Every emotion dead emptiness my new world living for no reason just day by day .

Place "only" after "emotion".

Add a comma after "emptiness".

The rest of this line is a little rocky, just re-word it for better understanding,it just don't make that sense.

"suicidal thoughts no longer exist why die when I have returned from hell a new man???...... I believe that only few understand my reason ..."

Add a comma after "exist".

I really love that last line, it describes a lot in such few words.

"Darknes is my shelter,your memories forgotten ..your last words in graved in my heart .I have become a monster wandering life with no purpose , a changed man ??...."

"Darknes" should be "Darkness".

Put spaces after your commas.

"in graved" should be "ingraved".

4/5 from me, a very captivating write, your wording was good and this was such a thought-provoking poem. The only thing you need to work on is your punctuation, but otherwise nice work!

Take care and God Bless!

~MaryAnne

I really liked your last line and thought it was a great end. Not only that it brought up many questions in my head. Nice write overall maybe u can read one of mine.