Paying the price for all her lies

by Finalgravedigger   Sep 8, 2008


Slowly the mind is drenched in so called engulfing "darkness"
The pain drives many to be deprived into lasting numbness,
Words shriekingly echo and take control of pitiful minds
As she implants and shoves cold truths that always hide.

Dancing and laughing we thrive on this rich lovable lie
Growing with us until the day that our souls turn dry.
Remember the morals and souls that were created to be in vain,
Eagerly encircling you as we yearn to know your true name.

The fakeness is too keen that cruel reality has no line.
Our imagination and morals rigidly desecrate and decline.
Hoping and craving for the help of our goddesses advice.
Wrapped and tied down we embrace your delusional vise.

Drowning further and deeper with smiles upon our faces,
Thanks for breaking us down into what humanity calls a disgrace.

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  • 16 years ago

    by ghosts in bloom

    Oh, I absolutely love this piece. (: The cadence was practically flawless, and you captivated me from first line to last. A very dark and enthralling vibe while reading this poem, I was really intrigued by your wordings. Overall it set me in a very strange and different place while reading, and when it was over I was left wanting more. (: Which is why I read it about three times. Truly a great piece from you.

    These two lines really hit me,
    they're truly amazingly written:

    "The fakeness is too keen that cruel reality has no line. Our imagination and morals rigidly desecrate and decline."
    -Stunning!

    Also, I loved the last two lines. Really ended the poem with a punch. Fantastic job, keep it coming.

  • 16 years ago

    by Shotput Girl

    This was deep. It had some flow to it but not a lot. You did a good job. I could feel some emotion.

  • 16 years ago

    by KeyxMashingxParody

    The wording and flow was pretty good, but it was somewhat, dead, I didn't feel much emotion, and the point you were trying to cross, I didn't get very well... Still a good write. 4/5

    sorry it took so long, I'm writing an Epic Novel, and I'm busy with schooling.
    <333333

    Sincerely,
    Elizabeth

  • 16 years ago

    by lost in lovee

    Dha flow was really qood.
    ii dont really qet it tho maybe dhatsz cuhsz iim kinda slow tho. lolz

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    As always an excellent flow this time with rhyme
    The deep dark depth is an abyss of despair yet an enjoyable read in a strange sort of way. You have not lost your touch
    5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

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