Great job, this was very unique and descriptive.

i don't like to make suggestions, but i noticed that the first stanza didn't entirely rhyme like the rest of the poem. was this intentional?

Slowly the mind is drenched in so called engulfing [darkness]
The pain drives many to be deprived into lasting [numbness]
Words shriekingly echo and take control of pitiful [minds]
As she implants and shoves cold truths that always [hide.]

nonetheless, it was still very good! 5 :]

- Jess

"Slowly the mind is drenched in so called engulfing "darkness"
The pain drives many to be deprived into lasting numbness,
Words shriekingly echo and take control of pitiful minds
As she implants and shoves cold truths that always hide."

Absolutely brilliant stanza, great word choice that had me wanting more.

Good job with this whole poem, it was all so captivating, and you did an excellent job on this poem. Keep writing, always and forever....

First of all congrats on the win! You deserved it. :]

This poem truly captivated me. You took the title and just made it your know keeping me interested throughout. The vocabulary here blew me away! The flow was flawless and the hidden meaning behind your words was just powerful. Your words just painted a entrancing image in my mind leaving me wanting more. I was just lured from the first line and blown away from the last. I applaud you. :]

I also nominated this.
Well done.
*5/5*

Very deep. Very interesting. Also, very well written.

"Dancing and laughing we thrive on this rich lovable lie
Growing with us until the day that our souls turn dry."

I loved that line, just because it completely turned the tone of the poem. It made it into what it was from the start. Good job.

As always an excellent flow this time with rhyme
The deep dark depth is an abyss of despair yet an enjoyable read in a strange sort of way. You have not lost your touch
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Dha flow was really qood.
ii dont really qet it tho maybe dhatsz cuhsz iim kinda slow tho. lolz

The wording and flow was pretty good, but it was somewhat, dead, I didn't feel much emotion, and the point you were trying to cross, I didn't get very well... Still a good write. 4/5

sorry it took so long, I'm writing an Epic Novel, and I'm busy with schooling.
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Sincerely,
Elizabeth

This was deep. It had some flow to it but not a lot. You did a good job. I could feel some emotion.

Oh, I absolutely love this piece. (: The cadence was practically flawless, and you captivated me from first line to last. A very dark and enthralling vibe while reading this poem, I was really intrigued by your wordings. Overall it set me in a very strange and different place while reading, and when it was over I was left wanting more. (: Which is why I read it about three times. Truly a great piece from you.

These two lines really hit me,
they're truly amazingly written:

"The fakeness is too keen that cruel reality has no line. Our imagination and morals rigidly desecrate and decline."
-Stunning!

Also, I loved the last two lines. Really ended the poem with a punch. Fantastic job, keep it coming.