by Ashley B Sep 9, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
And i can feel the pain inside |
by Mishka
Wow i really like this... it's sad... and i love the ending. you poor thing i am sorry this person decieved you. |
I love the analogy! Its perfect and suits your poem very well. Simple, yet effective. Good flow. I like the repition of lines. The subject is so common, im sure everyone can relate. Overall, great job! |