Meep. wow.

I think this poem is really well thought out but the rhythm and tense should be touched up on.. For instance the opening lines

"With every broken family, comes a withered son
that quietly blames himself for what hes done"

Are a bit choppy to be read.. So you could switch a few words within the lines to make the rhythm more smooth

"With every broken family, comes a withered son
Who quietly blames himself for everything he's done"

In between the first and second stanza you switch tenses.. You're talking about what the son feels about himself and what he's doing (in current time) in the first stanza.. Then you say "his feelings would bury him in a sea of regret"
in the next line. You should either change your tenses or make the transition of talking about current time to the future more smooth.

These are just a couple things I noticed when I read through your poem. You should work on your rhythm/tenses and break up stanza's so the poem is easier to read..

On the other hand.. You did an AMAZING job of putting emotion into such a short poem and getting your point across.

Overall, I think this was well thought out and a good portrayal of emotions.. 4/5

Keep writing! (: