It's a very emotional poem to be honest! And it came straight from heart. Good to read but structure is not that good. If you write it in a better way that would create more interest for the readers.

I thank you all for your comments. I am only just comming into my writing and appreciate all comments to help me make my writing enjoyable for all.

Nicole, tell you this from my heart, this work of yours is a heart touching one. I love it.