A perfect night
by Obscura Sep 10, 2008
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I look into my loves eyes while there glowing like firefly's i freeze my moment of hell what is this trick? what is this spell? there is no spell only love my words unfreeze and flow freely like a dove now i draw breath my mind fleeting my heart still beating i go to speak a whisper of a shout the words die at my lips before they get out i feel there hand in mine a touch smooth so fine they come close and rest their head on mine a love so pure only the best such a beautiful sight we lie down and bathe in the moon light |
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14 years ago
by Chantal
I like it♥ :)
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14 years ago
by Chantal
I like it♥ :)
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15 years ago
I loved yur poem, when i was reading it felt real to me.... my favorite part of the poem is the ending it was awesome!!
<3
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15 years ago
by isabel
I dare to disagree... :) Your poem is amazing... I only used more metaphors lol
In fact, I would actually say yours is better... It feels more real... =)
Loved your comparison with fireflies, it's really wonderful...
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15 years ago
by Good Enough
"we bathe in the moon light" tht is such a perfect ending. this is a really good poem and its so lovy dovy.
rest their head on my a love so pure
this line right here didnt really make sense to me but over-all i like this poem
