War

This is exactly why soldiers get ptsd. i live next to ft hood and have had many soldiers tell me it went just like that. you did an awesome job in much fewer words.

Hey I like this poem cuz it is full of meaning n has a tru ring 2 it! It has a few spelling mistakes in it bt apart frm that it is very good.

Hey I like this poem cuz it is full of meaning n has a tru ring 2 it! It has a few spelling mistakes in it bt apart frm that it is very good.

I can see alot of thought went into this piece. Reall good job, 5/5. Em

Love it.

After the horror,
after the sights
after the stammering
gunfire {DURING THE} nights

when it leaves a bitter taste
{THIS ONCE PEACEFUL} land in waste
good soldiers become dam{N}ed
the enemys blood on their hands

while death sweeps across the land
soldier{S} stands with a gun{S} in {THERE} hand
{ONE STOPS}think{S} ... what have i done?
as he sees the ground is redder than the sun

he looks at himself
{FEELING HE IS THE ONE TO} blame
he sees there suffering
{AND}he feels their pain

{MEMORYS POUR INTO} his head
he remembers home, his family
the ones hes left alone
and with a heavy heart
he steps outside the {DEATH}warzone

^added some things in {} that i think ties in better. i love this poem, its so touching and real. it would be nice if you could add another stanza in there somewhere saying "he can taste blood in his mouth" or something and something about surviving, great job though.

i have a friend who is home from the army, he was sent to irak and i thank god he came home alive. though its hard for him to live now..he was in the middle of a conversation to one of his friend squadies when he was shot in the head.my friend still replays it in his head all the time, and i just want to take his pain away - i cant, i will never be able to.this poem reminds me of him..

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