Comments : Gorgeous Eyes Capture Her Heart. (Nonet)

  • 16 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    I really enjoyed this. I thought the emotions seemed genuine. I did notice, however, that the fourth line has seven syllables.

    "For those empty arms open"

    For - 1, those - 1, emp/ty - 2, arms - 1, op/en - 2.

    But that's the only thing I saw that would go against the rules of the form. Everything else? Perfect, as usual. :]

    Five out of five. [5/5]

    ``Briana

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    Amazing poem... very well written. The syllable count was off a little bit. But, that didn't stop it from being amazing. Great write...

  • 15 years ago

    by Margaret Ruthfi Thomas

    Sweeettttt