I'm depressed. Like really... my girlfriend and I have been arguing a little bit lately. And I would die if I lost her.

I loved this poem. Because your feelings were conveyed so well. And the topic holds so much meaning.

Aw thats so sad...i really liked it...5/5! =)

That was sad but good. you dont have to change anything, i liked it this wasy. keep writing.
-Stephanie

This is terribly sad. i am so sorry for your pain. its very well written though. keep up the good work

So sad but good, ive got tears in my eyes because i feel your emotion because i like you thought i didnt love someone and now it may be too late.
great work!!

Wow.

really good poem.
very deep and meaningful.

IT is very well written. Great piece of work.

~Leon~

Thank you all for you positive feedback!!

Am glad you all felt the emotion in my words..

Guess i really DID love her, Shame I didn't realized it til it was too late!

Thanks everyone! :)

What I feel is your poem is good as far as the emotion is concerned. It shows lots of love and sorrow for losing someone.
But structure could have been better. This poem has longer lines but it ends with the lines that are very short. Just my perception.
Overall it's good. Well expressed feelings!

Because I cried subconsciously

i can relate much , i am like living your story now,!!

great work

I like the format, however in my opinion the sad faces :( give the reader, well me anyway, the impression of it being written by a juvinial, which of course you are not!

I like the rhyme, but the lines are a bit busy, which interupts the way this poem flows.

This is just my opinion. If you would like futher assistance please PM me.

Michael

That was very good it flows nicely and makes you sad inside while reading it .. love the emotions :)

Thanks everyone for your comments... Am taking it all in, and hopefully my next poem will be better!

Aww...very nice indeed its the after-feeling men get when they had been 'playing' out and in of their love...ALL men should NOT realise things when they had lost it...i think this is not just a poem,,,but a message to all men who dont appreciate what they have until its gone!!!!!!..brilliant..

Hey dis ones better den d 1st 1 dude....im gonna get sum time and read d others as well...wen i get d time 2..btw really nice poem...awwh just hurts...doesnt it?..i can understand!...lines 4m a broken heart!

Aww man I'm sorry!! that's really sad!! T_T... but I loved the poems! [[1-2]] ^-^ good writing!

As I said in "part one." My boyfriend broke up with me just last night. and reading this, made me wanna cry. And that might sound bad, but thats actually a very good thing. If I could feel the emotion that strongly, you obviously wrote a very good piece. I liked it. And it was a good "part two." Matched nicely and you kept the same repitition aspect.

Good job.

~Casey Jillian

WOW this is a great ending to the first one
I loved this two part poem it was really good

Wow thats a great poem
great writing!

I LOVED the last stanza. It was cute. :]

Awwww. This is so sad! Again, i can feel you put your heart into this and I can definately tell you were really crazy about her. 5/5 Keep it up!