You can't give up!!!! You're too good!!! Even this poem was really good....such distraught in every word. I'll try to help you the best way i can....sit down and think of one deep word....like my poem "What is Saddness?" I took the idea or Saddness and tried to define it....then i went back and tried to add a rhyme scheme. Just do that a couple times and then let me know! But seriously i enjoyed reading your poetry and i don't wanna see you give up!!!!
Take care...
~*~Amber~*~

I really like this, it was great! Don't stop writing. ~sasha~

Well, I'm not trying to be mean, I'm really not, but you have a lot of work to do. I would correct any and all punctuation errors if I were you. By that I mean capitalize the first letter of the first word in each line, and fix the spelling errors.

I would re-write this line as well:

"the words i have wrote,.. how they once,
filled my life with meaningful emotions.
now lie in crumbled ruins at my feet."

I can see what you're trying to do, trust me, i really can, but the way it's worded just sounds awkward. Not trying to offend you, but I did say in my post that I would leave honest comments.

Another w well written poem. This poem had good flow in it. The rhyming to was good. Good job.

Well I'm glad to see this wasn't your last poem. :]

I think if you enjoy doing something you should stick to it no matter what. So yeah.

Anyways.. the poem was good, but go back and look at the punctuation. There are some i's that need to be capitalized, and some comma's needed. Just re-read it. :]

Keep writing, okay?

Cayce

I love this poem though I know you have the poet's will to keep writing and we all feel this at times, but we know we must write because that is what we do.