Now this is better. It had some flow and rhythm to it.. in the first few stanzas.

I was really like the repeat of "I'm the one" alot of people don't like te use of "I" or of repeating, but I think it was really making a statement about how upset you were at being the one to blow it.

Anyway, you got away from the pattern after awhile. If you are going to go for a repeater, you need to stick with it. And again, your rhyme scheme was a bit faulty, but it was better.

Try to clean it up a bit and it will be awesome!