A broken dreams...

Hm. This was short, but still nice. I do think, however, that you could improve greatly with making the poem longer, and adding better words.

"The Unbreakable heart,"

-- "unbreakable" should not be capitalized.

"Suddenly it just turn into a broken dreams..."

-- Mmk. Either remove the "a", or the "s" on the end of "dream". "turn" should be "turns". It should look like one of the following: "Suddenly, it just turns into a broken dream" -OR-
"Suddenly, it just turns into broken dreams".

Overall; four out of five. [4/5]

``Briana

Clear, concise, to the point.........very nice!

I know exaclty what broken dreams are like, trust me on that one.

Short and to the point. good job.

5/5

Yep, honey, we all go through that. Your poem is simply stated, but its the honest truth. Just remeber, your dreams are only yours, no one elses. What you do with your life is up to you. You can choose to fullfil your dreams, or you can choose to let it all go..... I wish you the best. Fell free to PM if you want to talk or just need someone to listen.