Echo like screams inside my head.
^This line completely through off the 11th stanza.

Okay so strong strong real emotion in this poem, but it could have been so much better. The flow was really hard to keep up with I had to slowly read the poem. Words just didn't come out easily. The rhyming was forced and noticably forced. The words were just too basic. YOu could have been more orgininal and creative if you were using a cliche goar poem. Keep trying and you will get better :). Don't take me as mean, I am just trying to help.
<3tay
4/5