Her (incomplete)

So far so good, but it will help if you fixed some parts so when the second part comes the poem can flow better.

"There are days now and then
when I try hard to pretend
that everything is okay"
>love the start of your poem is strong and it sort of sets the reader up for what is ahead..i really like that.

"but we all know thats not the way that things have been"
>this line, however, doesn't quite go with this stanza...i don't like the way it's straight out with the emotion..sometimes is better to leave the reader to figure out the emotion by themselves...if it were me i'll change it or probably just leave it out.
*but then again this is my opinion. take it or leave it...=)

"you used to treat me like your queen"
>like this line alot.

"But since she came along
everything started to go wrong
we don't talk as much
and i've lost your gentle loving touch"
>this whole stanza is pretty good, but it confuses me a little...you are talking about your love right? at first i had the idea you where talking about your friend you have a crush on or something because you said "you used to treat me like your queen" and then you said "since she came along ....." and that whole stanza threw me off. probably give a little more detail as to who you're talking about....
*again your choice.

Over all i enjoyed reading this piece.
Keep it up!
You have talent.

**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*