Something amazing

Awwww This poem is so well written.... Id love to be able to feel like this about someone..... Very gorgeous...

5/5

Overall, I thought this poem was alright. The beginning was very good. However, the literature in the last couple stanzas lost it's appeal. I would suggest taking out the edited expletives and replacing them with something that flows better with this piece. I personally think that this poem would be better without the swearing. Stanza by stanza, here are my thoughts:

"There.s something about you
that i can.t let go
you.re something amazing
like chocolate flavored snow"

~ This is probably my favorite stanza of the poem. I know, it's a little OCD of me, but "There's" "I" "can't" "You're" Okay, now overlooking those, I like this stanza a lot. It flows beautifully, and I like your comparison to chocolate flavored snow. Very original. Well done.

"in so little time
we.ve been through it all
our f.ckups and booboo.s
but we all have flaws"

~ I would suggest replacing the third line with something a little more advanced, rather than what you have there. I do like the concept behind this stanza, but it could be stronger with a different third line.

"f.ck the critizism
backstabbers and h.oes
iLOVE YOU W/ALL MY <3
i want the world to know"

~ To be honest, this is my least favorite stanza. And as for it being the last one, in my opinion, it needs some work. For one, I don't think symbols should be used in literature to replace a word. Two, the first two lines kind of made me lose interest in the poem. I would suggest using words that are more appropriate for writing a love poem. Again, I don't agree with expletives being contained in a love poem, but if it's what you feel needs to be there, then keep it, but in my opinion, this poem would be better without it.

Sorry if that's a little too critical. You wanted comments and I don't believe in the "good job" or "could be better" type of responses. Anyway, there is my input. Do with it what you wish. :-)