He Who Lives Alone

by january friend   Sep 13, 2008


Checking the time of the grandfather clock
Before he walks out the door
This man knows that time won't stop
Not even if you pray for one minute more.

He's happy for every single breath that he takes
He watches the sun sail across the sky
He notices the shapes that the clouds make
But he never asks why.

He's finally found his love
His one true passion in life
And everything that he does
He loves so much, never had time for a wife.

Clever fingers gently fold
A small grain of growth
into life. This he can hold
A pot on terms of an oath.

All alone he will work his magic
They have not given him this task by chance
But never has a life ever been so tragic
As the man who lives alone with his plants.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Rolo

    I really enjoyed the beginning as it had a nice structured rhyme scheme and a really easy flow. I got lost in the middle when the rhythm changed and it threw me off. I had to re-read it in order to pick back up on the story. But I did, and I love the story. Nice job, a bit choppy in some spots but good ideas.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I think Mark is right about the "Checking" part, that kinda threw me off at first. But ither than that this was a very well done poem. It was almost like a story and I enjoyed reading it. Keep it up dear. Nik

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I didn't see the ending lol. Anyway it was a nice way to end a poem. Unpredictable = Good.

    (Checks) the time of the grandfather clock
    = Checking *adding 'ing' improves the flow. (In my opinion)

  • 16 years ago

    by Wereallbladesarntwe

    Great emotive write, reminds me of my life, xP well done

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