=[ this is sad fwenchy :( feel better hun

Wow this poem is truly darness and showing people that do care about you...You don't want to cause pain towards there live...You pretend to be happy but in the inside you are sad.....which I don't blame you.....love it

Wow....im like speechless....

you made me think there....damn....this poem deserves 10/10!!!

Incredable Poem your words were more then words they were emotions, created form your heat and put to paper to relise your sadness Im very sorry that you are lost in what soudns like a world of pain, but just try to stay sain.

- Gaige -

I know this poem did a great help for to you to feel relieved.....

hmmm... how i wish i can make one too.! ^_^

The pain last longer.. lasts *
The cut gets deeper.. - The cuts grow deeper ?
Makes me laughs into cries. - Turns my laughs into cries ?
Just thinking "what if I went away and never came back. Leave this world forever" - Left this world forever ?
Has I think this. - I've thought this ?
The pain I'll bring them.
The tears that I'll make them cry. - Change both I'lls to it would ?
The darkness that once was mine is now theirs. - Change is now to would be ?

All the things with question marks are just suggestions that would make it flow better and make it all one verb tense . I really liked this .. I know what it's like . 5/5

I liked the title and ur style in writing really..
but there are some typos that need to be checked..It would make ur poem perfect;)
Keep up the good work:)
I look forward to checking more of ur poems;)

This poem is really good it reminds me alot of myself... it is funny how when u are feeling all of these different feelings you think that you are the only one and then like on this web site you can come on here and find so many different people that are having the exact same thing going on as you!! keep it up 5/5

Wow another incrediable piece!!!
I loved it so much hun keep up all of your great work!!You get better as time goes on!!

Love the frustration
keep writing