Like i said talent girl such a good one im have been suffering with depression for i while and this poem realy got to me with the way i feel

100/5
great job girly

jess

This is an amazing poem :) You took a subject that is pretty much overdone on this site but your poem is different from all others.. You made it speciall, your own =) Great job!

The only thing that I though would be better in this poem is:
And now you cry
above my grave.
You didn't know. . .
you couldn't save.

--> if you change the last line to "but you could have saved"

5/5

The first two stanzas are superb they capture you and are very powerful...great write 10/5

Amazing poem your very talented and speak from the heart

Very well written ;]