An Amazing Feeling

by BREEawNUHH   Sep 14, 2008


``Kinda cliche, I know. Oh, well. & the title is temporary. If you have any ideas, lemme know. <3

Staring at the night sky,
wrapped in your arms.
I know that I'm safe now,
no one can do any harm.

Whispering in my ear,
those sweet things you say.
Everything is perfect here,
just like every other day.

I tell you I love you,
and say you're it for me.
"I love you, too, baby,
and you've got the key".

Kiss my lips with passion,
but ever so gently and sweet.
I just hope that you know,
only you can sweep me from my feet.

Hold me close to your body,
and never ever loosen your grip.
Everyday until we're old,
because you make my heart flip.

Briana Coulter
09.13.08

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  • 16 years ago

    by Yeka

    Awww thats sooo sweet and to much love.....=) keep it up okay (^_^) 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Matt M

    Good job, kept it short and sweet and straight to the meaning.

  • 16 years ago

    by kasia nicole

    Omg that was such a great poem i loved it sooo much. it reminded me of if i wrote it it was really good keep up the work 5/5
    -kasia

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    You were right it was really cliche, but you know what.. the feeling of love is cliche it's self, so you can't really help it! I'm sure this poem could be related by many, I can relate to this in a different way kind of. I would have definatly liked someone more unique of course, something original, something so much more descriptive. You could definatly flip this poem around 180 degrees and make it sound so much more romantic and original. I would edit if I were you, use a thesarus or something. It works, and you learn new words along the way. Anyways, very beautiful and adorable.. falling in love, giving someone that key to your heart, being in their arms.. it's a girls dream. :] Well doneeee, just make it more of your own! 5/5

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