Comments : I Need You.. Now.

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "The lightning flashes outside of my window,
    and the thunder cracks as loud as ever."
    `I think the word choice could have been much better here, but the reader definatly can picture this anyway.

    "Those nights were amazing, the best ever,
    the ones when you would hold me tightly.
    I keep reading the letter that you wrote me,
    before you took your life 'cause it was too much."
    `Wow the last two lines are completely devestating. :\

    "Sometimes life is too much for me to deal with,
    because you're not here to make it all better."
    `It's so true. Once that one person is gone, theres really no one that can make anything better.. but that one person and they are gone. I feel the pain in these lines. I hope that this isn't true. :\

    "I know that we'll be together again one day, I know that,
    but maybe that's not enough for me. I need you.. now."
    `Hmm, I liked it. Pretty good ending I suppose.
    :]

    Overall, I could feel the writers emotions and feelings in this write very well. It's a very sad write, hope it didn't really happen. Well done though, 5/5. (:

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    I am sorry for your loss and I really don't know how true this poem is. I saw a lot of the emotion pour out and the images were great but fir the most part That was great. Yet I think being older I tend to have to see this with abit of naive youthfulness. I liked the work but I know time heals all, it never says it takes away the pain but you some how learn to cope good job Plot121..