Without Paternity

by Daniel   Sep 14, 2008


Bemoaning and bitter I constantly acquire,
But there is much to unravel about my father,
I'm made to believe that he perished in a war,
As I endure scorn and exclusion from peers.

I know something is wrong as she harbours guilt,
About my illegitimacy for truth I really quest,
Since the gossip in the neighbourhood has it,
For fact and false will not least foregather.

Unable to satisfy my ever increasing curiosity,
I undergo a titanic torture psychologically,
By you concealing the truth about my paternity,
What a bitter sweet truth about life to go by.

Being consumed in the sense of unworthiness,
I feel excluded and incomplete in the social classes,
My individual paternal identity remains less,
While the issue proves to be a potential mess.

To single mothers here goes my appealing word,
Break the silence to me no matter how bad,
For we are vulnerable and the most affected,
By fate for out of wedlock we were sired.

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  • 15 years ago

    by kelleyana

    Daniel, you touch a very sensitive subject. In our society today there are so much children, even adults who doesn't know who there fathers are. Sometimes the mothers kept it as a secret which is not at all good for the children. Everyone that is born into this world has the right to know their roots. keep on writing, kel.

  • 15 years ago

    by kelleyana

    Daniel, you touch a very sensitive subject.

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    I love this poem, Daniel. I really enjoyed the read and it just made me want to read and read and read. I was glad it came to an end when it did though, because it's the perfect length. You have a great start, a great ending, and a great poem. I think that you did a wonderful job putting it together, wording it, showing emotion through-out it, and making it flow so well. It's probably one of my favorite poems. And, I've probably given out ratings that are 5/5 ... 3 times this week? But, this is definitely a 5/5. I'd give it more if i could.

    About my illegitimacy for truth I really quest,
    [About my illegitimacy for truth that I quest,]

    - This line threw me off. I think it was how you had it worded, and once I changed the wording around it made quite a bit more sense to me.

    By you concealing the truth about my paternity,
    What a bitter sweet truth about life to go by.

    - Truth is stated TWO time in these lines. It really stuck out. At times it's a good thing to repeat and so on, but I don't like it here. It just doesn't work. If I were to change it I would somehow change the second line to something else. That was the main one and it doesn't quite make sense to me on top of all that.

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