I love this poem, Daniel. I really enjoyed the read and it just made me want to read and read and read. I was glad it came to an end when it did though, because it's the perfect length. You have a great start, a great ending, and a great poem. I think that you did a wonderful job putting it together, wording it, showing emotion through-out it, and making it flow so well. It's probably one of my favorite poems. And, I've probably given out ratings that are 5/5 ... 3 times this week? But, this is definitely a 5/5. I'd give it more if i could.

About my illegitimacy for truth I really quest,
[About my illegitimacy for truth that I quest,]

- This line threw me off. I think it was how you had it worded, and once I changed the wording around it made quite a bit more sense to me.

By you concealing the truth about my paternity,
What a bitter sweet truth about life to go by.

- Truth is stated TWO time in these lines. It really stuck out. At times it's a good thing to repeat and so on, but I don't like it here. It just doesn't work. If I were to change it I would somehow change the second line to something else. That was the main one and it doesn't quite make sense to me on top of all that.

Daniel, you touch a very sensitive subject.

Daniel, you touch a very sensitive subject. In our society today there are so much children, even adults who doesn't know who there fathers are. Sometimes the mothers kept it as a secret which is not at all good for the children. Everyone that is born into this world has the right to know their roots. keep on writing, kel.